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PostSubject: Rōarku Puredetā   Rōarku Puredetā I_icon_minitimeTue May 12, 2015 2:25 pm


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Basics!
Name: Rōarku Puredetā
Age: 15
Birthdate: August, 8th
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Heterosexual
Rank: D | Soldier

Village: Hanagakure no Sato
Element(s): Fūton | Wind Release
Specialties: Weapon Technician
Special Characteristics:
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Appearance!

Height:
5'11
Weight: 145 lbs
Hair Color: Light Grey/Blonde
Eye Color: Hazel
General Description:

Head: Due to the very few years spent on this earth, Rōarku has no visible scars nor has he reached the age where blemishes and acne have occurred, thus what you get is somewhat of a baby faced monster. His mouth and all of that falls below it are shrouded behind an elevated neck portion of his clothing. More than likely kept just above three inches, Rōarku's hair is light grey and even almost blonde under certain lighting conditions, this as well stems to his eye brows and the all hair across his body. Lastly, what's not depicted above are his  hazel eyes, a trait stemming from his mother that he happens to care for deeply.

Torso/Upper Body: Rōarku's body, defined and toned through years of physical training & punishment, appears to be in its prime. Although lean, its composition appears to be one built for speed and power, thus atoned to his signature fighting-style. Across his back vertically is a tattoo of his brother's name and the kanji for " My Brother Keeper" is placed just below in the center of his back.

Clothing: As the weather changes so does whatever Rōarku wears, though no matter what it is it has a feint reminder of the land of his previous residence. Though it is not uncommon to regularly find him in a sleeveless vest, it's colors ranging from brown to white to charcoal grey, with braces across his wrists. Typical for most shinobi, he wears a pair of charcoal grey open toed sandals with the heel revealed also, their height reaching just above the ankle and below his shins which are wrapped in bandages. Upon his lower region he wears a pair of loosely-fitted pants, black on the outside and dark beige on the inside, which are then wrapped to below the knee in what appear to be elastic bandages. Their use for nothing more than appearance.

About You!
Personality:

[ Overview ]
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[ The Thrill of the Hunt ]
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[ Heart of a Champion ]
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[ Brain Capacity ]
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[ Silent Speaker ]
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History:

War Torn Arc.

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Intervening Pack Arc.

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Harboring a Fugitive Arc.

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My Brother's Keeper Arc.

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The New Assignment Arc.

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RP Sample:
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Faceclaim: N/A


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PostSubject: Re: Rōarku Puredetā   Rōarku Puredetā I_icon_minitimeTue May 12, 2015 5:28 pm

I saw in the chatlogs you where asking about if Synesthesia was allowed. Your write up is fine, overall; you just need to be aware that SCs cannot be combat related, with the exception of listing advanced elements.

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Name: Enhanced Senses
Type: Personal
Description: Like member's of clans with notable canine familiar's, Roarku displays senses heightened to ranges far beyond that of basic human proportion.

Sight | Clansmen can increase or reduce their visual sights up to 25 M away. Though viewing at the Microscopic level is capable when something is within at least 5 M of them, the strain it puts on the eyes makes it so that moving about is unable to occur.
Taste | Clansmen can decipher the chemical composition of substances that pass into their mouths. Ingredients such as those found in poisons can be made known to a user if they have knowledge of the substance.
Touch | Akin to a pulse, clansmen's Somatosensory system seemingly extends 25 M, thus allowing them to perceive the vibrations made by objects on the same medium as them.
Hear | The Auditory system of a clansmen is able to perceive any sound in a 25 M radius of them as if it were being said within close range of them. Additionally, heart beats can now be perceived at a distance of 10 M.
Smell | As much of a positive as a negative, the increase to the Olfactory system of the clansmen allows for an increased perception of anything within a 25 M radius of them.

This is heavily combat related, an as such it can't be allowed as is. This is essentially a way to circumvent the REA (Reaction Time/Ability/Perception) Stat.


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Hanagakure no Sato occurring along the border of the Lightning Country

Right now, you need to go in and remove reference to ALL canon regions an villages. There is no 'Land of Lightning' in this world. We took the AU concept to the extreme, while a 'ninja' world, it's not Naruto's world, or even dimension. We took the concept of Kaguya/Obito's ability to jump dimensions and ran with it. Refer to The Site History and Plot for further information about that.

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their discovery of a kekkei genkai

These don't exist on site. Abilities aren't locked to bloodlines anymore, anyone can develop them with training/teachers and the right set of elements, specs, and stats.

I'm glad you dropped that note about the organization, i was about to call you out on it. But that's fine, if you plan on making this a thing, you need to get with Jai and work out the details.

I'd highly prefer that you make a new RP sample for this character, even if you're basically adapting it from another site.

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PostSubject: Re: Rōarku Puredetā   Rōarku Puredetā I_icon_minitimeWed May 13, 2015 3:18 am

Removed the Enhanced Senses, although I was wondering if you could help me word it differently so that it fits within the sites limits. If so, that'd be helpful.

Fixed the small universal errors.

Made a new RP Sample.

Hopefully all is good! @__@'
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PostSubject: Re: Rōarku Puredetā   Rōarku Puredetā I_icon_minitimeWed May 13, 2015 3:16 pm

Still finding references to Kumo.

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their first stop being the closest village, Kumogakure no Sato.

Fix that one bit, and this can be approved.
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PostSubject: Re: Rōarku Puredetā   Rōarku Puredetā I_icon_minitimeWed May 13, 2015 3:47 pm

Done
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