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PostSubject: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Wed Apr 22, 2015 12:10 am

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PostSubject: Re: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Wed Apr 22, 2015 4:20 pm

You need to make the element for Shrapnel Smokescreen Kouton.

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Name: Medium Weapon Transformation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon their Kouton element to manipulate metal in their body or immediate surroundings to form up to 3 medium-sized weapons such as swords, chains, shields and windmill shurikens.

Expand on this. You need to include/make it clear that you can only produce weapons that you have the ability to use, which is dependent on your physical specialties. You also must specify how long the constructs last, and a general idea of their power.

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Name: Steel 360 Shrapnel Barrage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user focuses the chakra in their body and releases a sudden brutal burst of steel shrapnel in all directions. The shrapnel travels extremely fast and covers a large distance, making this technique difficult to avoid.

Need damage numbers here. How bad can these cut? how deep and they pierce into the body? Can they damage armor?


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Name: Steel Dance
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(1M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 Posts
Cooldown: 4 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the metal in their body to form thin durable blades atop their arms that reach out three feet and are extremely sharp. These blades are more wide near their upper forearm and narrow to a sharp point at the end of their width.

Again, need damage numbers. How deep can you cut with these blades?


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Name: Carbon Destruction
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the Kouton element and atomizes steel and binds it to the foe's body. The steel will harden over their form and immobilize their body. Upon command, the metal enters their body through their pours and openings, inducing paralysis and asphyxiation.

I'm iffy with this being C-rank. Also, you need to state how long it takes for them to suffocate once you shove the metal inside of their bodies, and if there's any way to counter the effect. My reasoning for saying this needs to be B-rank is that B is the min rank for jutsu that can be outright lethal, and even then they take 5 post of effect minimum to be fatal unless you manage to decapitate or blow the heart of the target clear off.

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Name: Steel Coverage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(10 meters)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description: The user imbues their body with steel charged with their chakra. Upon being touched or touching opponents or objects, the object or person is covered in liquid steel with extraordinary adhesive properties. It begins to overtake their bodies and turning them into steel that the user can control.

..... Sweet Lord no. Not at B-rank. This is S-rank. Minimum S-rank. Non-human/animal conversion I can allow at B-rank, but this is a no as is. I can't eve let plot jutsu do that at B-rank; and I have a plot jutsu for the coming opening evens that does something similar.


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Name: Large Weapon Transformation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon their Kouton element to manipulate metal in their body or immediate surroundings to form up to 5 large weapons such as spears, axes, fuma shurikens, steel balls and guillotines.

Same as the other one. Also, Windmill and Fuma shuriken are the same thing.


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Name: Steel Commandment
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the metal in the area and redirects it to any specific location such as an opponents location to attack them with a barrage of relentless metal.

Need more information in general. How much metal? How much damage can be done?

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Name: Steel Guardian of Hinowagakure
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 4 Posts
Cooldown: 12 Posts
Description: This technique allows the user to make a giant smiling metallic being shaped as a warrior with a fox mask, this warrior is created from tons of steels infused with chakra making it very hard. This technique is made mainly for defensive reasons however, Itami uses it for attack after he mastered the technique completely. This warrior can be as big as the user wants and Itami can even apply more steel to it making it even harder. The warrior has different shape and structure which differs according to the user. The user can grow any body part of the warrior at anytime meaning that it can stretch it's arms and any body part the user wishes. It doesn't matter if a part of the warrior was destroyed because the user can grow it back using steel release. The user can create equipment for the warrior to use at anytime, for example: (Swords,Shields,Bows and arrows). Any steel technique that Itami knows, he can have the warrior perform on a grand scale for an additional 25 chakra per technique.

I actually really like this concept. However, you're going to need to change the duration and cooldowns here. This is the type of jutsu that requires a chakra drain per post cost. In this case, you're looking at a good 25 chakra per post drain, which would change the cooldown to Duration + 6-8 at least.


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PostSubject: Re: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Wed Apr 22, 2015 9:45 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Thu Apr 23, 2015 3:54 pm

Gingitsune, Taii!
Gingitsune Taii is literally translated to Silverfox Pose. It is a special hand-to-hand combat the Rakuenkage Itami himself made. Very few in his village even have seen has fighting style: often those who are on the receiving end of his Taijutsu do not live to tell about it. The only practitioners of this martial art are the ANBU operatives that Itami teaches himself. No one outside of his village's ANBU knows this fighting style and has no known counter-measures for the fighting style. It proves both effective and efficient against both hand-to-hand and armed opponents.


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PostSubject: Re: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Fri Apr 24, 2015 9:34 pm

D Rank

Name: Small Weapon Transformation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Description: The user draws upon their Kouton element to manipulate metal in their body or immediate surroundings to form up to 3 small weapons such as shuriken, garrot wire, kunai or senbon. The transformation of these weapons remain permanent unless reshaped by another jutsu. These weapon's sizes can be manipulation during the first post of the jutsu to a maximum of 3ft in total circumference and remain the size expanded to. In terms of damage, these weaons are on average compared to the basic ninja tool, equally sharp and durable.

You might as well make this a scaling jutsu, just to save yourself the wordcount of learning three seperate jutsu. A Scaling jutsu is one that increases in power with rank.


Name: Shrapnel Smokescreen
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Short (0-5m)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description:  The user inhales deeply; mixing chakra in their lungs and throat to produce a thick cloud of black smoke over a specified area. This smokescreen has small metallic particles mixed in with it. Within the smoke cloud the visibility is reduced to less then three feet. The smoke is not-lethal; but it does sting the eyes and lungs; causing anyone caught in it to cough, wheeze, and tear up. Can be dispelled with a Wind jutsu of equal or higher rank.


I'm not sure how if jutsu...


C Rank

Name: Medium Weapon Transformation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon their Kouton element to manipulate metal in their body or immediate surroundings to form up to 3 medium-sized weapons limited to swords, chains, shields and windmill shurikens. The transformation of these weapons remain permanent unless reshaped by another jutsu. These weapon's sizes can be manipulation during the first post of the jutsu to a maximum of 6ft in total circumference and remain the size expanded to. In terms of damage, these weapons are sharper, more durable and heavier than the basic ninja tool.


See above.

Name: Steel 360 Shrapnel Barrage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user focuses the chakra in their body and releases a sudden brutal burst of steel shrapnel in all directions. The shrapnel travels extremely fast and covers a large distance, making this technique difficult to avoid. The damage of this technique is moderate, at 5M this technique's shrapnel will pierce through a body. At 10M this technique's shrapnel will bury 3" inside an opponent's body. At the maximum of 15M this technique's shrapnel will puncture just 1" inside the opponent's body. Any armor above D Rank can provide a defense to prevent being punctured, though C Rank armor at close range of 5M will still be punctured and buried 3" inside the foe.


Seems legit. Just change the range to [Close (0-5m) Mid (5m-10m), Far (10m+)]

Name: Steel Dance
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(1M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 Posts
Cooldown: 4 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the metal in their body to form thin durable blades atop their arms that reach out three feet and are extremely sharp. These blades are more wide near their upper forearm and narrow to a sharp point at the end of their width. These blades are very sharp and durable, capable of cutting off a limb or 3" deep into a foe's body. Given enough strength, the user can completely pierce an opponent's body and impale them if their strong enough.


If you're going to want to impale someone, you're going to need a str requirement to do so, as per your own words. In addition, this will need a chakra drain to maintain. Just use something appropriate per post.

Name: Carbon Destruction
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the Kouton element and atomizes steel and binds it to the foe's body. The steel will harden over their form and immobilize their body. Upon command, the metal enters their body through their pours and openings, inducing paralysis and metallic poisoning. The paralysis will make the foe's body heavier and stiff like lead, the metallic poisoning will cause the opponents to become sick with fever and vomit, blur their vision and impair their judgement.


As Karu said, definately not at C rank. This is more like high A, maybe even S rank stuff. This also require more explanation -- I dont see steel sticking to someone's body like this unless it has been magnetized, or you have constant contact with the victim's body. In addition, this would require a chakra drain per post to maintain.

B Rank



Name: Steel Coverage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(10 meters)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description: The user imbues their body with steel charged with their chakra. Upon being touched or touching opponents or objects, the person or object is covered in liquid steel with extraordinary adhesive properties. It begins to overtake their clothing, armor & equipment and turning them into a super-sticky steel that the user can control. Medical care is required to treat this sickness & to remove the metal.


Once more, this will require constant contact with the victim, as well as chakra drain per post.

Name: Large Weapon Transformation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: he user draws upon their Kouton element to manipulate metal in their body or immediate surroundings to form up to 5 large weapons limited to spears, axes, fuma shurikens, steel balls and guillotines. The transformation of these weapons remain permanent unless reshaped by another jutsu. These weapon's sizes can be manipulation during the first post of the jutsu to a maximum of 8ft in total circumference and remain the size expanded to. In terms of damage, these weapons are far sharper, more durable and heavier than the basic ninja tool.

See above, about making this a singular jutsu.

Name: Steel Commandment
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the metal in the area and redirects it to any specific location such as an opponents location to attack them with a barrage of relentless metal. The amount of metal commanded depends on the individual skill of the shinobi. Genin-200lbs, Chuunin-400lbs, SPC Jounin-600lbs, Jounin-800lbs & Kage-1,000lbs


This is where it gets complicated. Steel release only allows control over metal that you've created yourself. So, unless you've created a shit ton of metal that you've left lying around the battlefield, you wont be able to use this jutsu. Or, you could learn magnet release and do it that way.


A Rank
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S Rank
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Name: Steel Guardian of Hinowagakure
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 25 Chakra per post
Cooldown: 7 Posts
Description: This technique allows the user to make a giant smiling metallic being shaped as a warrior with a fox mask and four fox tails, this warrior is created from tons of steels infused with chakra making it very hard. This technique is made mainly for defensive reasons however, Itami uses it for attack after he mastered the technique completely. This warrior can be as big as the user wants(Anywhere from 5M to 100M tall) and Itami can even apply more steel to it making it even harder. The warrior has different shape and structure which differs according to the user. The user can grow any body part of the warrior at anytime meaning that it can stretch it's arms and any body part the user wishes. It doesn't matter if a part of the warrior was destroyed because the user can grow it back using steel release. The user can create equipment for the warrior to use at anytime, for example: (Swords,Shields,Bows and arrows). Any steel technique elemental or Taijutsu technique that Itami knows, he can have the warrior perform on a grand scale for an extra 25 chakra chakra per technique.


We're going to need a cap on how large this creature is [We seriously cannot have a 300 foot tall metal structure walking about], in addition to a chakra cost to form any weapons or regenerate parts of the creature back.

All in all sir, please fix the above, and bump the topic when done.

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PostSubject: Re: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Sat Apr 25, 2015 12:40 am

Bump

And Shrapnel Smokescreen is just a smoke variation of the original technique, it just has small metal shavings in it.
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PostSubject: Re: Itami [Jutsu Registry]   Tue Apr 28, 2015 10:47 pm

D Rank
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Name: Steel coverage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the Kouton element and liquidizes a handful of metal on or around them. When making contact with the target, the liquid will expand to cover the opponent's body or the object and then harden. On opponents, the liquid will spread over their mid-section and wrap around their arms and legs, immobilizing them in a thing layer of hardened metal.


A trap jutsu like this needs to be at least C-rank, with a per post drain [If lasting more than one post]

Name: Shrapnel Smokescreen
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Short (0-5m)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description:  The user inhales deeply; mixing chakra in their lungs and throat to produce a thick cloud of black smoke over a specified area. This smokescreen has small metallic particles mixed in with it. Within the smoke cloud the visibility is reduced to less then three feet. The smoke is not-lethal; but it does sting the eyes and lungs; causing anyone caught in it to cough, wheeze, and tear up. Can be dispelled with a Wind jutsu of equal or higher rank.


Approved



C Rank

Name: Steel 360 Shrapnel Barrage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close (0-5m) Mid (5m-10m), Far (10m+)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user focuses the chakra in their body and releases a sudden brutal burst of steel shrapnel in all directions. The shrapnel travels extremely fast and covers a large distance, making this technique difficult to avoid. The damage of this technique is moderate, at 5M this technique's shrapnel will pierce through a body. At 10M this technique's shrapnel will bury 3" inside an opponent's body. At the maximum of 15M this technique's shrapnel will puncture just 1" inside the opponent's body. Any armor above D Rank can provide a defense to prevent being punctured, though C Rank armor at close range of 5M will still be punctured and buried 3" inside the foe.


Oookay. I do apologize about this because I should have noticed it before; the wording on this jutsu concerns me, as with the say its worded now, its basickly an instant-kill within 5 meters. A jutsu needs to be at least B rank before it can even begin to be lethal. You'll either need to bump this up a rank, or change the piercing power.



Name: Steel Dance
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(1M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Posts
Cooldown: 4 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the metal in their body to form thin durable blades atop their arms that reach out three feet and are extremely sharp. These blades are more wide near their upper forearm and narrow to a sharp point at the end of their width. These blades are very sharp and durable, capable of cutting off a limb or 3" deep into a foe's body. Given enough strength, the user can completely pierce an opponent's body and impale them if their strong enough.


Still needing that strength requirement for impaling. [Given that this is a C rank jutsu, C2 or C-3 strength would be acceptable]

B Rank

Name: Steel Coverage
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-Rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(10 meters)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 posts
Cooldown: 5 posts
Description: The user imbues their body with steel charged with their chakra. Upon being touched or touching opponents or objects, the person or object is covered in liquid steel with extraordinary adhesive properties. It begins to overtake their clothing, armor & equipment and turning them into a thick hardened layer of metal over their body to immobilize them.


Two jutsu with the same name at different ranks? See above for what is required.

Name: Steel Commandment
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Element: Kouton
Range: Mid(15M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 3 Posts
Description: The user draws upon the metal in the area and redirects it to any specific location such as an opponents location to attack them with a barrage of relentless metal. The amount of metal commanded depends on the individual skill of the shinobi. Genin-200lbs, Chuunin-400lbs, SPC Jounin-600lbs, Jounin-800lbs & Kage-1,000lbs. This only applies to metal that the user themself has created and manipulated.


You're going to need a different description for this, as none of your (or any steel release jutsu) dictates how much metal is produced with each jutsu creation. You'd be better off controlling liquid metal.



S Rank

Name: Steel Guardian of Hinowagakure
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: Kouton
Range: Close(5M)
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 25 Chakra per post
Cooldown: 7 Posts
Description: This technique allows the user to make a giant smiling metallic being shaped as a warrior with a fox mask and four fox tails, this warrior is created from tons of steels infused with chakra making it very hard. This technique is made mainly for defensive reasons however, Itami uses it for attack after he mastered the technique completely. This warrior can be as big as the user wants(Anywhere from 5M to 50M tall) and Itami can even apply more steel to it making it even harder. The warrior has different shape and structure which differs according to the user. The user can grow any body part of the warrior at anytime meaning that it can stretch it's arms and any body part the user wishes. It doesn't matter if a part of the warrior was destroyed because the user can grow it back using steel release. The user can create equipment for the warrior to use at anytime, for example: (Swords,Shields,Bows and arrows). Any steel technique elemental or Taijutsu technique that Itami knows, he can have the warrior perform on a grand scale for an extra 25 chakra per technique. In addition, when the giant generates or reforms weapons & armor, it costs an additional 15 chakra.

Okay. This creation is still a bit too big [150 feet tall]. In addition, any weapon created by to be used must be one you have trainnig to use yourself. Please note that in the jutsu description. Also, please note the speed at which this creature can move.

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