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PostSubject: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 1:52 am

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 2:04 am

Alrighty, let's get this started.

1) SS-Rank pets are restricted. You cannot start with them.
2) This ties into chakra nature restrictions. Your pet must have the same elements as you; so if you take lightning on this pet, you've locked yourself into learning Lightning as your secondary element. Not much of an issue, I'm just informing you of this right now. In order to have Yin-Yang release, you MUST have Yin and Yang as your primary and secondary elements (in either order) and cannot take another element.
3)The chakra cloak needs to be created as a jutsu.
4) I need to check with another admin, but I believe we have Tailed Beast Ball written up already. If so, I'll give you that coding to use here. I can tell you right now that it is S-rank, not SS rank, and would be non-elemental; as the bijuu-replacement beasts we have are elementally based, and only one has Yin/Yang/Yin-Yang release, and they all have some version of Bijuudama.
5) The Type of this beast would be Combat Pet || Legendary || [Beast type] (which I'm assuming is dragon spirit, given the image and such).

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 2:18 am

1) What rank would it be, then? I'd assumed SS, but maybe S? The entire classifications thing hurts mah brain.

2) Okay. I don't really want the Yin-Yang Release, as I merely thought that the Tailed Beast Ball was Yin-Yang. I'm fine with having Lightning Release as a secondary element, as that's what I had planned.

3) Easily done, once I get to listing what Jutsu I have. I won't really be making TOO many custom ones, so I'll pick most of them from the library.

4)Fixed it!

5) Awesome! I just made one up from scratch, because I had assumed there wasn't one. I couldn't find it, at least.
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 2:26 am

Pets are ranked the same way as ninja. Think of it in terms of Bleach then:

academy/foot soldiers would be Genin (D-rank)
low rank seated officers = Chunnin (C-rank)
senior officers (10-4) = Special Jounin (B-Rank)
third seats/newer vice captains = Jounin (A-Rank)
Captain-level = Jounin (S) (S-Rank)
General Commander - Transcendent = SS-Rank

Pets are sorted using the same general power scale; so a beast on this level overall would sit at upper A, lower S-rank. It's basically just the powers of the chakra cloak that would decide if this is A or S rank, really; so I'll have a better answer for where it falls when you have that written up.

The chakra cloak needs to be made now, since it's an ability/jutsu granted by the beast, it has to be created with the beast itself.

I poked the admin, it seems I'm insane and we don't have it made yet. I'll work up the changes you need to make to your version tomorrow after work; I'm on my way to bed, honestly. xD

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 2:37 am

Okay, I wrote up the stats for Okami's Chakra Cloak. Awaiting your approval.
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 4:54 pm

Alright, here's what you need to do for the jutsu:

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Name: Tailed Beast Ball
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element:
Range: 75 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 15 posts
Description: By combining Yin and Yang chakra into a perfect 2:8 ratio while spinning it in several different directions at once in a spherical shape, the Tailed Beast Ball is the pinnacle of Chakra Control. When created properly, it focuses a massive amount of energy into a single point, exploding outward with the force of a nuclear blast when crushed. The user can also throw the orb, causing it to explode on impact. Damage suffered is severe, the explosion easily taking off limbs and tearing apart muscle, armor or not. Without medical treatment od A-rank or above, there is a great chance that a direct hit may end in death (35%).

Element: /
Range: 50 meters
Duration: /
Cooldown: 8 Posts
The description itself is fine outside of the last line. Change it to read 'S-Rank or higher armor will reduce the impact and damage of this jutsu by 1 rank. Unless medical attention of sufficient rank (A-rank or higher) is given within 8 posts, the target will die."


This is pretty much standard for jutsu that work like this.



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Name: Tailed Beast Chakra Cloak
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Versatile
Element: N/A
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2-8 Posts
Cooldown: 15 posts
Description: By coating himself in the chakra of Ochita, Okami can create a chakra cloak akin to that of a Jinchuuriki's. It is unknown at this point whether or not the Heavenly Dragon is a Bijuu himself, but this silvery coating of Chakra is devastatingly effective. It boosts Okami's base abilities of Speed, Strength, Endurance, and Reaction by +1 rank, and allows Okami to access all jutsu known by Ochita, including the legendary Tailed Beast Ball.

Type: Supplementary || Defensive || Offensive
Duration: -40 chakra per post
Cooldown: Duration + 8
Description: I need you to reword this a bit. Take out that bit about the status of your beast, this is for basically clarification sake, and to keep this in line with site standards. As this would basically be the generic, basic form of a 'bijuu' cloak, write it up as such. You need to work in a drawback to this, something along the lines of 'for x posts after the cloak is broken or released, the user suffers (insert drawback here).'

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 5:15 pm

Fixed it ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 5:29 pm

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Name: Tailed Beast Chakra Cloak
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Versatile
Element: N/A
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: -40 per post
Cooldown: Duration + 8
Description: By coating himself in the chakra of his Bijuu, a Jinchuuriki can create a chakra cloak of devastating effect. While the color of the cloak varies depending upon the Bijuu in question, the power granted by the cloak is universal. It boosts the user's base abilities of Speed, Strength, Endurance, and Reaction by +1 rank, and allows the Jinchuuriki to access all jutsu known by their Tailed Beast, including the legendary Tailed Beast Ball. For 3 turns after this chakra cloak burns out or is broken, the user will suffer a -1 to his Chakra Stat. This technique can be especially dangerous for Jinchuuriki to use, as the chakra cost is high and you must work in perfect harmony with your Bijuu, else you will lose control.

That's the right general idea, but not what I meant. The point of the drawback is balance overall; anything that boosts stats/ability that much needs an equal drawback for fairness sake. In this case, you'd need to be affecting everything that is boosted. When I said tweak the description of the beast, I meant take out that it's a bijuu, as it's not a bijuu; cause we don't have bijuu. You can call the technique a bijuu cloak, but this isn't an actual bijuu. Once that's been tweaked again, the jutsu is fine.


Now, I completely admit that I missed this earlier, so I'mma touch on this now:

Quote :
Unlock Requirements: N/A
Special Training Requirements: To train this ability, Okami must spend a full thousand words for every two posts he wishes to access this massive pool of raw power on his own. Otherwise, Ochita may only grant him this power on the verge of death.

You'll need to put in an unlock requirement for this beast in general. The extreme power of it means you'll need to do the work to be able to use it normally. Pretty much, you just need to do a thread of you 'synchronizing' with the beast; it can be basically any thread of decent length where you and the beast work together or whatever. It's going to need to be at least 3000 words; but you can split it across several threads if you need to; just make sure that you title/note the threads as being used toward this end. The Special Training Requirements needs to be 1000 words for each post of availability. That's the site baseline for things like this, and I can't really give you a break without giving everyone else one too.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 6:00 pm

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Name: Ochita, the Heavenly Dragon
Type: Combat Pet/Legendary/Dragon Spirit
Rank: S
Element: Fire, Lightning
Species: Tien Lung
Description:
Special Characteristics:

Name: Nagareboshi Shīru (Falling Star Seal)
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Requirements: Okami/Ochita Only
Ability Tier: Tier 4
Minimum Rank: Jonin (A)
Description: This seal, placed on Okami's eye when he swallowed a fallen star, allows for Okami to access the Heavenly Dragon's massive pool of Chakra and, temporarily, his knowledge of jutsu and abilities, utilizing a "Chakra Cloak" for this effect. As of now, this may only happen when Okami's life is in danger, but can later be trained to be used at will until Okami runs out of chakra. This Chakra Cloak is silvery in color, and takes on the consistency of an open flame when active.
Unlock Requirements: A full 3000 word topic for Okami to harmonize with Ochita.
Special Training Requirements: To train this ability, Okami must spend a full thousand words for every post he wishes to access Ochita's Jutsu and the Chakra Cloak.



Jutsu:

Name: Fire Release: Great Fire Annihilation (Katon: Gōka Mekkyaku - 火遁・豪火威却)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: Katon
Range: 75 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: -40 chakra per post
Cooldown: Duration + 10
Description: A technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into fire, and then expelled from the mouth in a massive wall of intense flames, which covers an expansive range. This makes the technique extremely difficult to either avoid or contain, with it requiring the combined efforts of several Water Release users in order to extinguish the flames.


Name: Lightning Release: Striking White Shadows (Raiton: Butsukaru Shirokage - 雷遁・打白影)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: Raiton
Range: 75 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: -30 chakra per post
Cooldown: Duration + 10
Description: This technique takes the form of massive white lightning arcs. They can be tall as forest trees, capable of destroying nearly anything in their path. When coming upon contact with conductive objects, the arcs release a widespread burst of electricity, shocking anyone near them. The arcs cause massive Raiton damage to any target they come in contact with; leaving behind horrible 3rd degree burns for 6 inches radiating from the point of contact, with additional 2nd degree burns radiating an additional 2 feet outward. Glancing hits cause 2nd degree burns at contact point and radiating for 9 inches outward. Direct hits can pierce directly through the unprotected body with no problems what so ever and can only be blocked by S or SS rank armor with Raiton protections. The arcs can be redirected by someone with knowledge of the jutsu itself, or with SS-rank Raiton ability.


Name: Tailed Beast Ball
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: N/A
Range: 75 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 8 posts
Description: By combining Yin and Yang chakra into a perfect 2:8 ratio while spinning it in several different directions at once in a spherical shape, the Tailed Beast Ball is the pinnacle of Chakra Control. When created properly, it focuses a massive amount of energy into a single point, exploding outward with the force of a nuclear blast when crushed. The user can also throw the orb, causing it to explode on impact. Damage suffered is severe, the explosion easily taking off limbs and tearing apart muscle, while armor of S-Rank or above may lessen the impact, dealing 1 rank less damage. Without immediate medical treatment of A-rank or above within 8 posts, a direct hit will end in death.


Name: Tailed Beast Chakra Cloak
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Versatile
Element: N/A
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: -40 per post
Cooldown: Duration + 8
Description: By coating himself in the chakra of his Bijuu, a Jinchuuriki can create a chakra cloak of devastating effect. While the color of the cloak varies depending upon the Bijuu in question, the power granted by the cloak is universal. It boosts the user's base abilities of Speed, Strength, Endurance, and Reaction by +1 rank, and allows the Jinchuuriki to access all jutsu known by their Tailed Beast, including the legendary Tailed Beast Ball. For 3 turns after this chakra cloak burns out or is broken, the user will suffer a -1 to every stat boosted. This technique can be especially dangerous for Jinchuuriki to use, as the chakra cost is high and you must work in perfect harmony with your Bijuu, else you will lose control.

Approved. Move to your locker when ready.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 7:32 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Wed Dec 02, 2015 7:33 pm

Okami wrote:
Item: Kunai
Rank: D
Quantity: 6
Price: 15 Ryo per kunai. Available in packs of 10 for 100 Ryo.
Description: The kunai, or throwing knife, is one of the
most common tools of the shinobi, as it is useful for both close quarters and long range combat, as well as being used in conjunction with other materials such as explosive tags or wire to form deadly combinations.
Appearance:


Item: Shuriken
Rank: D
Quantity: 6
Price: 15 Ryo per shuriken. Available in packs of 10 for 150 Ryo.
Description: The Shuriken, or throwing star, is a common long range projectile weapon of the shinobi.
Appearance:


Item: Wire
Rank: D
Quantity: 100 feet
Price: 150 Ryo per 100 feet.
Description: Wire is a common utility tool among shinobi, as it has countless uses. These highly durable strings are able to be used to Rappel, manipulate weaponry, bind an opponents movement, as tripwire and countless other things. They are limited only by your imagination.
Appearance:


I would also like to use my 300 Ryo to purchase

Item: Kunai Blades
Rank: C
Quantity: 1
Price: 300 Ryo per blade.
Description: They have the general appearance of kunai with similar bases, but the blades instead are curved, elongated and single-edged, giving them similar appearance and function to swords. Each of the blades has a small hole right near its long, bandaged hilt, which at its edge sports a larger versions of the standard ring all kunai have.
Appearance:


Approved. Ryo deducted.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Fri Dec 04, 2015 6:13 am

Name: Kusanagi
Type: Katana
Rank: SS
Upgrade Slots: 3/4
Affinities: Katon
Description: This katana, forged with chakra-enhanced ore and imbued with the bones of a mythical creature of SS-Rank, is a work of art as much as it is a weapon. It was hand-forged for Okami by the master smith residing on the edge of the Land of Heavens. Folded over 1,000 times, Kusanagi is truly the man's masterpiece. The katana averages 73 cm in length, or 28.5 inches.

Enhancements:

Name: Dance of the Black Swallow
Type: Elemental Enhancement
Description: Runes dance along the edge of the blade as black flames erupt. These flames are ever burning, and burn in excess of 1,500,000 Degrees Fahrenheit, causing any who touch it other than the user to sustain 4th Degree burns over the entire area that comes into contactwith the flame, spreading at a rate of 1 sq. inch per post contact is sustained. The blade itself is unharmed, and the flames feed off of Okami's chakra at a rate of 40 per post.

Name: Grass Cutter
Type: Item Enhancement
Description: Kusanagi's edge was so keen that the master smith who forged it went through three separate grinding wheels to finish it. It is capable of cutting through anything of A-Rank or lower like butter, while it cuts halfway through items of S-Rank and causes a stalemate with other items of SS-Rank, perhaps even notching them if enough force is applied.

b]Name:[/b] Inferno Attunement
Type: Elemental Enhancement
Description: When drawn, the wielder of Kusanagi gains SS-Rank skill in all Katon effects. It is currently attuned to Okami, and if Okami were to die then it would have to attune to someone else. Attunement requires 1,000 words of training, and drains half of your maximum chakra, leaving a black flame tattoo across one's wrist and forearm. If the user has less than 800 chakra when attempting attunement, it will fail catastrophically and will drain all of their chakra, leaving the blade unusable for 1 IC week, or 10 posts.


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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Fri Dec 04, 2015 5:07 pm

Okami wrote:
Name: Kusanagi
Type: Katana
Rank: S
Upgrade Slots:
Affinities:
Description: This katana, forged with chakra-enhanced ore and imbued with the bones of a mythical creature of SS-Rank, is a work of art as much as it is a weapon. It was hand-forged for Okami by the master smith residing on the edge of the Land of Heavens. Folded over 1,000 times, Kusanagi is truly the man's masterpiece. The katana averages 73 cm in length, or 28.5 inches.

Enhancements:

Unbreakable: This sword is forged so well that it is completely unbreakable, and never needs to be sharpened.
Keen Edge: Kusanagi is capable of cutting through any other weapon and armor of A-Rank or below as if they were butter. Other S-Rank and SS-Rank weapons require more force to do so, being able to cut only halfway through another S-Ranked weapon or armor and only notching an SS-Ranked one with a single strike.


1) Use this template for enhancements that aren't jutsu:

Code:
[b]Name:[/b]
[b]Type:[/b] (Elemental Enhancement || Item Enhancement || Supplementary Enhancement ect. Whatever fits bests)
[b]Description:[/b]

If the enhancement is a jutsu, use the jutsu template.

2) Cutting through A-rank with this is fine. S-rank would basically be a stalemate without enhancing the blade's strength and endurance. SS-Rank would break it. Weapons, unless otherwise stated, are treated as having X-3 END, where X is the stated rank of the item.

3) If you're using SS materials to make it, it's going to be SS-rank. You need to adjust the description accordingly.

4) Even if something isn't applicable in a given template (Say you have a non-elemental weapon), you need to put / or N/A in a stated category. This is for ALL templates. Otherwise, we see it, and treat it, as unfinished.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Fri Dec 04, 2015 5:14 pm

Done and done.
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Fri Dec 04, 2015 7:31 pm

Okami wrote:
Name: Kusanagi
Type: Katana
Rank: SS
Upgrade Slots: N/A
Affinities: N/A
Description: This katana, forged with chakra-enhanced ore and imbued with the bones of a mythical creature of SS-Rank, is a work of art as much as it is a weapon. It was hand-forged for Okami by the master smith residing on the edge of the Land of Heavens. Folded over 1,000 times, Kusanagi is truly the man's masterpiece. The katana averages 73 cm in length, or 28.5 inches.

Enhancements:

Name: Indestructible
Type: Item Enhancement
Description: Kusanagi, in a word, is perfect. The blade itself is invincible, able to withstand any sort of force put upon it. It also never needs to be sharpened, as the edge never dulls.

Name: Grass Cutter
Type: Item Enhancement
Description: Kusanagi's edge was so keen that the master smith who forged it went through three separate grinding wheels to finish it. It is capable of cutting through anything of A-Rank or lower like butter, while it cuts halfway through items of S-Rank and causes a stalemate with other items of SS-Rank, perhaps even notching them if enough force is applied.

Said this before. You cannot use an SS-rank weapon as an A-rank ninja. Honestly, the Kusanagi isn't all that powerful by our standards; you could easily scale this back if you absolutely have to have it. But if you do, the numbers on the cutting go down. The indestructible is bunk, too. SS or not, anything can be broken, and as this is basically just extremely high quality steel with relatively mild chakra enhanced properties, it is far from indestructible. Given the power you have it at, it's barely an A-rank blade, you're really selling it short for SS-rank; and would be basically paying for air, to put it simply.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Fri Dec 04, 2015 7:59 pm

Okami wrote:
Name: Kusanagi
Type: Katana
Rank: SS
Upgrade Slots: N/A
Affinities: Katon
Description: This katana, forged with chakra-enhanced ore and imbued with the bones of a mythical creature of SS-Rank, is a work of art as much as it is a weapon. It was hand-forged for Okami by the master smith residing on the edge of the Land of Heavens. Folded over 1,000 times, Kusanagi is truly the man's masterpiece. The katana averages 73 cm in length, or 28.5 inches.

Enhancements:

Name: Dance of the Black Swallow
Type: Elemental Enhancement
Description: Runes dance along the edge of the blade as black flames erupt. These flames are ever burning, and burn in excess of 1,500,000 Degrees Fahrenheit. The blade itself is unharmed, and the flames feed off of Okami's chakra at a rate of 40 per post.

Name: Grass Cutter
Type: Item Enhancement
Description: Kusanagi's edge was so keen that the master smith who forged it went through three separate grinding wheels to finish it. It is capable of cutting through anything of A-Rank or lower like butter, while it cuts halfway through items of S-Rank and causes a stalemate with other items of SS-Rank, perhaps even notching them if enough force is applied.

b]Name:[/b] Inferno Attunement
Type: Elemental Enhancement
Description: When drawn, the wielder of Kusanagi gains SS-Rank skill in all Katon effects. It is currently attuned to Okami, and if Okami were to die then it would have to attune to someone else. Attunement requires 1,000 words of training, and drains half of your maximum chakra, leaving a black flame tattoo across one's wrist and forearm. If the user has less than 800 chakra when attempting attunement, it will fail catastrophically and will drain all of their chakra, leaving the blade unusable for 1 IC week.


Significantly better. The first SC isn't bad, but you need to state what kind of damage the flames do; as well as any other offenive enhancement it grants. The only issue with the Inferno Attunement is the drawback. You need to stat the unusable period in post counts or thread numbers, since IC time is rather... murky.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Fri Dec 04, 2015 9:41 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Mon Dec 07, 2015 5:18 pm

There's a few changes that are going to be needed to be made to your chakra beast. Nothing major, however.

  • Your SC needs broken into two separate things. The cosmetic seal SC that allows you access to the chakra pool / jutsu of your beast, and then the actual chakra mode. The chakra mode will have to be written up as a jutsu which will have the training's and such listed on it. Now, I'm reading what you wrote and you mention this "Chakra Cloak" being made out of fire? If so, is that fire cosmetic or does it actually cause damage to those who come into contact with it? If it causes damage it will need an appropriate chakra drain per post. See the guidelines for what those appropriate drains are.

  • Your jutsu are fine minus the cloak. Considering our chakra pools at higher ranks a 3 post drawback for something you could essentially use for 10+ posts EASILY is not good enough. You need to make your drawback read something like "Duration of the cloak +3". Meaning if you hold the jutsu for 5 posts then you suffer the drawback to it for 8 posts. I also need you to update it to read that the drawback comes from your base stats. So if you're speed is naturally S-2 then you will be bumped down to S-1.


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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Mon Dec 07, 2015 5:57 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Mon Dec 07, 2015 8:36 pm

Alright, there is only one last thing and I apologize about this because I didn't realize until I was doing Luke's beast: the most jutsu a beast can start out with for free is 2. You can learn up to 10 in total if your beast is S rank, but only one of those ten jutsu can be S rank, the rest must be lower. So you'll have to choose two jutsu to start out with right away, and learn the rest later following the combat pet guidelines.
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Mon Dec 07, 2015 8:55 pm

Done?
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Tue Dec 08, 2015 9:09 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Tue Dec 08, 2015 10:58 pm

Okami wrote:
Item: Fine Katana
Rank: B
Quantity: -set-
Price: 900 Ryo each
Description: This high quality katana, comprisoned of a core of Ferrite, and an edge of martensite, this blade has both a solid core and a potent cutting edge, and is vastly superior to it's rusty comrade. The katana averages 73 cm in length, or 28.5 inches.
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I'd like to buy dis


Approved. Ryo deducted.

Note: Last warning on posting things in the wrong place in your registries. You need to clean out the first post, move your beast to your locker, and start posting your new requests there. Having to hunt for what's being worked on it a one-way ticket to getting it denied outright, or just ignored entirely.

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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Thu Dec 10, 2015 3:25 pm

Bump with new armor.
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PostSubject: Re: Okami [Item Registry]   Thu Dec 10, 2015 4:05 pm

Before I start modding this I want you to be made aware that once an item is approved it cannot be modded again later on; you will have to purchase it all over again if you wish to make changes. I see that you haven't used all of your slots, so I wanted to ensure you were aware of this before I went ahead and modded it.
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